Proj. H/Ex

[Valaska]

WARNING, This project is COMPLETELY copy righted, artwork is copy righted to, legally, Redic Nomad. The Story, witting, concept and images and all legal cases are directed to me, so if this plagiarized something I could be sued, and like wise =P.

This is the first page and teaser to my and Redic Nomad (Alias used to privacy reasons) and I was wondering what you guys thought about it!

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v434/Valaska/page1pewview.jpg

Criticisms welcome, questions welcome as-well :).

[epicor]

looks great. mind if i color it?

[Agge]

Mahirims in space? No thanks.

[VirtualPenguin]

Mahirims in space? No thanks.

Wondered what it was... No thanks :p

Really nicely drawn though :D

[epicor]

http://img356.rockyou.com/imagehost/12/12996/12996710/12996710_ed74a8361220708362_m.jpg

My first take on your comic

[Kralle]

I like it and look forward to seeing more, also good work with the coloring.

[ClownFoot]

Redic Nomad is the coolest name ever. Too bad it isn't your real name.

[Angelmar]

You may want to hire Epicor...

[ClownFoot]

You may want to hire Epicor...

I agree! It will make your furries in space story much more enjoyable.

[Bloody blade]

I like it and look forward to seeing more, also good work with the coloring.

Agreed. Also, your sig is awesome Kralle.

[epicor]

http://img345.rockyou.com/imagehost/13/13008/13008382/13008382_39c329461220762505_m.jpg

still working on it. didnt get time all day. this is fun stuff though!

[Valaska]

http://img356.rockyou.com/imagehost/12/12996/12996710/12996710_ed74a8361220708362_m.jpg

My first take on your comic

lol no I don't mind at all actually! I didn't get to see your picture actually it didn't come up hehe.

And the races like Reis (thats a chick lol) aren't the main focus hehe, there are humans in this. Redic Nomad is my Illustrator hehe, I am Kody Boen (Actual name). Thanks Kralie! I look forward to seeing how he coloured it too! lol

[Valaska]

I can't edit my other post, but man those colourings are really nice! Certainly a lot of Talent on yah! hehe

[mantoe]

Does this happen in the beginning of a scene? It is a bit hard to read.... I understand people getting shot or something, then a dog person in what seems to be a cockpit. Also the final panel has waaaaay too much black on the sides even with color they over power the whole page and my eye is drawn instantly there, instead of reading it in sequence. The top panels are tooo smooshed up top there.

However, the draftmanship and attention to detail is nice. I'm sure that most, dare I say almost all people who read comics will be easily fooled by pretty art and snazzy computer colors and cool space armor enough that you wouldn't need to improve it.

Side note on the art, there are a lot of nifty details and shapes, but the form the "meat" is missing. I have experience (not pro, but look at the pros most of them sac quality for time anyway) telling stories in comic style and my rule of thumb is that the page should read easily within one quick glance and you should not have to even read the text. Also the black and white ink should be able to stand on their own with out the crutch of computer colors. Most new comics totaly ignore these rules, but this is not an argument about old/new comic aesthetics, this is just a crit like you asked, that is a little more in depth than "wow badd azz lolz"

[Kralle]

I like the coloring like it is...the last panel with the black sides fits in the overall mood of this page and so does the rest of the coloring.

I refrain from refering to "tis ez badazz", the teaser page and the coloring blend together nicely.

[Valaska]

lol thanks again Kralle! But yeah no hard feelings Mantoe I'll help explain the page so far;

This is the first page, and there's not much to read. Eatch panel is supposed to be sort of cutting and out of place and its supposed to draw you to the bottom panel above all else, as its where she's supposed to be but her heads pretty chaotic.
Right now she's in a dropship, she's actually surrounded by her squad, but she's not in the right place. Reis the main character, the Natire as they are called in my universe, is a -very- messed up in the head girl! So some of the pages will be very odd and chaotic when she's breaking down, the series follows her mind set hehe.

Me and Redic weren't planning on colouring the comic, but I really like Epicors job it looks really nice hehe. I usually right in prose noveling. Comic's are new to me, but I feel that this page does convey it, but I don't know how else it would be done.

[epicor]

http://img273.rockyou.com/imagehost/13/13023/13023237/13023237_f85a195f1220842881_m.jpg

color changes. did em 1 handed cause i was feeding the baby, but its closer to what you pmed me

[BlackVolgan]

nice drawing Valaska, and nice drawing epicor.

[epicor]

volgan, your style is polar opposie to mine. id love to see your take on the same image

[Valaska]

Hehe very nice those colours are really close the the 7ths!