Thorpeyrox
09-02-2008, 01:35 PM
Rate it out of 10 and provide reasons why.
http://forums.darkfallonline.com/showthread.php?t=65723
"The Unis'ae Noc
Long ago, before the dawn of Time, there were two states of power: the great Light and the eternal Dark. There existed between them a constant struggle for control over the other. The struggle ensued for so long that if Time had existed, It would have come and gone before seeing any change. Although they were in eternal conflict, one power could not destroy the other.
As a result of the Eternal War, each force became stronger and stronger, though always equal to their adversary. It is said, however, that finally one force gained an edge over the other and intended to destroy the opposing force. It is not known which power eventually subverted the other, but chaos broke out before either force could be destroyed and engulfed both powers. The very fabric which held both powers together came undone. The resulting void swallowed the Light and the Dark. Eons of turmoil followed.
The two forces were trapped outside of existence for many more eons. During this time, no universe existed in a way which we perceive the universe now. Each force was outside of time and space. The very line that distinguished the two forces was removed. Slowly, each force became compact and unified. This state is known as the Unis'ae Noc: Where All is None. Finally, the power of the union of the two Great Powers nullified the Void of Nothing. The cooperative result was another cataclysmic event that ripped the Unis'ae Noc into tiny pieces and scattered them across a universe. It is this event that birthed Time.
Gradually, over many thousand millennia, the seeded universe evolved into great powers of Life and Death, and the Struggle resumed. We are all a part of this. Everything in the universe has this Light and this Dark within them. Humans have Life and this enables them to do good, but they also have an equal amount of Death, which makes them capable of great evil. Should this balance ever be upset again, the same void that engulfed all will open once more and devour the universe in which it created."
Taken from the thread, upon first reading this I wanted to bang my head against the table screeming "not another cliche light v.s. dark no one can win scenario" however it was more thought through than the usual ones I would see on any paper-based Rp.
Not too sure about the names if they have a real meaning to them instead of being pulled from thin air I would credit them more.
6/10 for me. I get the feeling of power play with the author bigging up his own character, overall I think it's quite good.
http://forums.darkfallonline.com/showthread.php?t=65723
"The Unis'ae Noc
Long ago, before the dawn of Time, there were two states of power: the great Light and the eternal Dark. There existed between them a constant struggle for control over the other. The struggle ensued for so long that if Time had existed, It would have come and gone before seeing any change. Although they were in eternal conflict, one power could not destroy the other.
As a result of the Eternal War, each force became stronger and stronger, though always equal to their adversary. It is said, however, that finally one force gained an edge over the other and intended to destroy the opposing force. It is not known which power eventually subverted the other, but chaos broke out before either force could be destroyed and engulfed both powers. The very fabric which held both powers together came undone. The resulting void swallowed the Light and the Dark. Eons of turmoil followed.
The two forces were trapped outside of existence for many more eons. During this time, no universe existed in a way which we perceive the universe now. Each force was outside of time and space. The very line that distinguished the two forces was removed. Slowly, each force became compact and unified. This state is known as the Unis'ae Noc: Where All is None. Finally, the power of the union of the two Great Powers nullified the Void of Nothing. The cooperative result was another cataclysmic event that ripped the Unis'ae Noc into tiny pieces and scattered them across a universe. It is this event that birthed Time.
Gradually, over many thousand millennia, the seeded universe evolved into great powers of Life and Death, and the Struggle resumed. We are all a part of this. Everything in the universe has this Light and this Dark within them. Humans have Life and this enables them to do good, but they also have an equal amount of Death, which makes them capable of great evil. Should this balance ever be upset again, the same void that engulfed all will open once more and devour the universe in which it created."
Taken from the thread, upon first reading this I wanted to bang my head against the table screeming "not another cliche light v.s. dark no one can win scenario" however it was more thought through than the usual ones I would see on any paper-based Rp.
Not too sure about the names if they have a real meaning to them instead of being pulled from thin air I would credit them more.
6/10 for me. I get the feeling of power play with the author bigging up his own character, overall I think it's quite good.